It looks cool, you deserve success for the effort you put into it....Only thing I would do to improve it is add a section titled "Holly's gardening tips" (and throw in a scene with a chick fucking herself with a cucumber or zucchini grown from Holly's very own garden), and a few cumfarting scenes.

Now before anyone says "But Burg, I thought you had NIGHTMARES about cumfarting..." I would caution you to pause and reflect on the more subtle aspect of the strokeability of what I suggested. There are cumfarting scenes, and then there would be a cumfarting scene DIRECTED BY HOLLY RANDALL....get it?