It's kind of interesting, though I'm not sure how much I like Erin. She seems like one of those whores that thinks she's above all whores; like Elisabeth Shue when she gets in the hotel with the kids who want to film their first time, and she suddenly doesn't even fit the role of a hooker.

The way you have the story structured gives it a blog-like stream of conscious personality that affects the pacing. I'm not usually into stories like these, about whores and their adventures, but I guess you can always continue.